Hello class! These are my reworks based on feedback. But more feedback would be awesome. I have kinda of completely changed the feature, just because I was having a hard time using the previous image, and making it look like a feature. In my previous exercises, I liked the "Hunger" big and bold and went with this idea. And took away the other photo and focused more on the boy and placed him so it can lead the eye to the quote. I also reworked the cover, making the type more expressive and fun. And made the masthead bigger.
Question: does the line at the bottom work better here for the department? This line keeps giving me trouble. thoughts?
The last one is the start of my TOC. Still in the works, so suggestions here would be awesome :)
See you in class!
Thanks!
Question: does the line at the bottom work better here for the department? This line keeps giving me trouble. thoughts?
The last one is the start of my TOC. Still in the works, so suggestions here would be awesome :)
See you in class!
Thanks!
I absolutely love your cover! It speaks directly to your target audience and I am certain they would be grabbing it right off the shelves.
ReplyDeleteThe simplicity of your feature and departments balances well with the over-the-top cover. The image of the boy is striking and the clean typefaces make it very easy to read. The cutlines are the perfect size; large enough to grab my attention, but not too large to distract focus away from the rest of the layout.
As for the Table of Contents, it does not seem to fit with the rest of the magazine. It seems too bare compared to the articles and covers. I would say go over the top with the contents just like you did with the cover. Maybe try adding small squares of preview photos or changing up the typefaces like the cover. Or maybe just adding more color could spice things up. Check out Seventeen's table of contents to maybe get some more ideas.
Lastly, your masthead is so unique! Love it!
The cover has come a long way! I love the different use of type in the cutlines, it works well especially for your audience. The department lines work well to lead your eye well. The feature is too similar to the department in my opinion, they share too many similar elements in their typography and structure for me to fully differentiate them. As with Brittany, I agree the TOC seems out of place with the magazine. I want it to be a little more outrageous, like your cover. Not as clean.
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Nadine – The designs are progressing nicely. Your feature is clearly “a Feature” now and your department looks like “a Department.” Nice. I look forward to seeing the following pages to those initial pages. Cover…. I’m going to sound a bit like a broken record when I say that the cut lines still detract from the hidden quality of your theme title. They overshadow it to the point that it could be missed. It should be the 2nd element we notice on the cover… and it isn’t. So, keep toning down the cut lines, pull them further down on the page. Reduce them, but use very bold fonts… and we’ll read them last – which is the correct visual hierarchy then. ToC is in progress but I see some good stuff happening already. That large photo is great as a background on which to dance some additional, smaller photos (adding page #s to the photos might be a good idea) giving the page some more excitement. The page numbers in the list are a problem… between the size and the format (centered sort of) they appear quite awkward. There are lots of other options for these so keep thinking. I’ve never actually seen a ToC with number spreads (4-5)… instead just use the first page that the article begins on. That will help you simplify that aspect. If you really want them to sit where they are, then make sure they are FR in the column.
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